99 Word Stories

The Riptide – Flash Fiction

Devin loved swimming. A powerful attraction drew her to the ocean which she couldn’t resist. The sea had become her companion and like a jealous lover demanded all her time.

The riptide struck and sucked her into the depths. The waves rolling above pulled one way, while the rip current below, pulled her in the opposite direction. Devin kicked hard, finally breaking free.

This had been her longest swim. Now, she knew for a fact, the experimental drugs had caused her lungs to grow. She could spend hours underwater without added oxygen. Her fate as a mermaid was sealed.

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I’ve written this piece of flash fiction for the writing challenge at Carrotranch.com. Here is the September 14, 2017, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a riptide. How can it be used to move a story? It could be a stretch of turbulent water or a pull of another kind. Go where the prompt leads even if you find it unexpected.

Respond by September 19, 2017, to be included in the compilation (published September 20). Rules are here. All writers are welcome!

Thanks for stopping by! ❤

64 thoughts on “The Riptide – Flash Fiction”

    1. LOL! This was my first try at flash fiction. Actually, I’m writing a book with Wendy Anne Darling – short stories and poetry called: Fairies, Myths, and Magic. I have all kinds of magical things up my sleeve. I’m glad you liked it. Hugs on the wing. ❤

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    1. Thanks, Viva. I had to write it at a normal length first and then go back and edit it down to the 99 words. It was a fun challenge to see if I could get my point across and still have a story! 😀 Thanks for reading. ❤


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