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#Haiku & #Senryu Poetry Forms

Now that I’ve got the 2019 Poet of the Week Compilation sorted, I wanted to talk more about writing and creating Haiku and Senryu in English with the traditional rules and what I call the “current” rules. Read my post here: 5/7/5 vs 3/5/3 & 2/3/2 Haiku & Senryu Styles for more information.

My challenge post for this week is Poet’s Choice, so this gives me an opportunity to go over the different forms.

HAIKU IN ENGLISH is written in these forms: Traditional form 5/7/5, Current 3/5/3, and Current 2/3/2 syllable structure. A Haiku is written about season changes, nature, and change in general.

I’ll write a Haiku in each form to illustrate. First 5/7/5 – traditional form:

white veiled clouds cluster
against a pale winter sky
the cold front arrives

Same Haiku in 3/5/3 current form:

white clouds drift
against a pale sky
cold rolls in

Haiku in 2/3/2 current form:

clouds drift
in pale sky
cold day

I will always be a traditional Haiku and Senryu writer. However, look at the evolution of this poem. I can see why many poets believe the 3/5/3 and 2/3/2 form better illustrate Japanese Haiku. The brevity is stark! One of the reasons I love the traditional style is because of the extra syllables. It allows the poet to share their experience by showing and not telling.

SENRYU IN ENGLISH is written in these forms: Traditional 5/7/5, Current 3/5/3, and Current 2/3/2 syllable structure. A Senryu is written about love, a personal event, and should have irony present.

I’ll write a Senryu in each form to illustrate. First 5/7/5 – traditional form:

Strumming my guitar
a love song slips from my lips
she’s found a new love

Same Senryu in 3/5/3 form:

guitar strums
love song serenade
my love leaves

Senryu in 2/3/2 form:

guitar 
serenade
love lost

Once again, the brevity of words is profound in the evolution of the three Senryu. The irony of singing a love song when your lover leaves you for another does come through in the meaning of each version.

How you decide to write your Haiku and Senryu is up to you. I prefer to write in a more traditional form, but my challenge will accept any of the three forms.

Review the differences between Haiku and Senryu:

Get busy and write some syllabic poetry!

31 thoughts on “#Haiku & #Senryu Poetry Forms”

  1. Thanks for clarifying this so clearly, Colleen! Great examples. I have to agree traditional gets more emotion across to me.

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    1. The abbreviated forms seem colder and lacking in warmth. I’ll continue to write in the traditional form. If folks don’t like that, they can go to the other guy’s blog. LOL! 😀

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  5. You’ve become quite the connoisseur of the art of poetry. You also have a wonderful gift for penning the poems as well. Your progression of the 3 forms is brilliant. 🙂 ❤

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  6. I think I agree with you about the increased length being better for a complete story. The really short ones seem like they’d be hard to evaluate or even understand because there’s so little to them. The senryu, especially, seems hard in 2/3/2.

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    1. Right? I read and write poetry to get something out of the poems with the hope that my readers will feel (or see) what I saw and felt. The brevity of the shorter forms is clever, but lacks emotion and warmth. Besides, if I’m rejected by the poetry societies that only write what they think is right, then I’m following through on my rebellious streak against accepting all societal norms. LOL!

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    1. You’re welcome, Fran. I’ve researched these forms and am in the process of writing a how to write syllabic poetry book. Not bad for someone who teaches elementary school poetry on her blog. 😉 LOL! ❤

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