The theme for #TankaTuesday this week is memories: sweet & sour. Here is my senryu series.

a full glass of wine uncorks old fantasies of him the sweetness of watermelon— memories Parkinsons— shaky endings of memory © Colleen M. Chesebro

The theme for #TankaTuesday this week is memories: sweet & sour. Here is my senryu series.
a full glass of wine uncorks old fantasies of him the sweetness of watermelon— memories Parkinsons— shaky endings of memory © Colleen M. Chesebro
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ooo I love this series!
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Thanks, Ruth. Do you see the difference between haiku and senryu? Senryu are all about us and what we feel as humans. I think haiku are much harder to write. ❤
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And i was bopping my head…. I got caught looking at bird as nature and well…. then I got confused! 🤷🏻♀️hopefully I’ll remember next time and review the wonderful cheat sheet for the 1,000th time. lol ❤️
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😂🧘 I know. You’re fine. Look what great senryu you wrote. ❤️
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😎❤️
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Wine can be such a miscreant. Lol! Your last stanza gripped my heart. Great poem, Colleen! 🙂
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LOL! But do you feel the human emotions in these senryu? See the difference between haiku? I think haiku are much harder to write. Senryu is so expressive because it’s all about us. ❤
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Yes, I do, and I agree. Senryu seems more flexible as well. I plan to keep writing both to get more comfortable with each of them. Thank you for your guidance, Colleen! 🙂
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You’re welcome. I’m wring more of them as well. ❤️
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Loved this Colleen, such a sad ending.
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Thanks, Denise. My brother in law has Parkinson’s. It really affects their memories. It’s so sad. 😦
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So does my brilother in law and aunt. So far, it hasn’t effect their memories too bad.
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I guess it’s a battle as they get older. I feel bad for anyone with this terrible disease. ❤
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I love this, Colleen. You’ve definitely got the sweet and the sour in these. Thanks for sharing!
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Thank you, Jan. I think the theme was hard for people to write about. The good and the bad are what makes life worth living. ❤
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Touching… It touches more people than we will never know. ❤
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Right? And it affects them when they are young, too. Michael J. Fox is still battling the disease. ❤
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Oh my–this is poignant, Colleen!
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Thanks, Merril. It’s a sad reality for many. ❤
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It is indeed, Colleen.
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So poignant.. 😦 it really is sad
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Thank you. ❤️
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Sad and beautiful. I love this, Colleen 💕🙂
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Thank you. It’s those emotions of sweet and sour that grab you. ❤️
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So poignant, Colleen. Tender — and a mix of sweet and sour. 💗
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Thanks, Gwen. That’s the mix of life isn’t it? ❤️
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Bittersweet. (K)
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So true, Kerfe. ❤
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Hi Colleen,
Here in third senryu, you used endings word. Is it ok if we use ing word in senryu?
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LOL!! Only if there is NO OTHER word that will work. I worked on this for two hours… if you can think of a better word for “endings” that gives the same meaning let me know. I know there will be times when you have to use an ing “ending.” But if you are using ing words to only fill the syllable count that is not favorable to our poetry. My rule still stands to not use ing endings. Does that make sense? ❤
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I understood. I thought in senryu we can use that is why I asked you. if I don’t get particular word then I was changing full phrase. Thank you for making me understand 🙂
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People get lazy and use the ing ending as a way to satisfy the syllable count. But in reality, we all know that sometimes there is no other word that will work. Do your best. ❤
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Now I can do in better way. Thank you dear Colleen for your good advice. I will keep in mind and try to work on it❤️
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You’ve got this, Jane! ❤
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Yes, thanks a lot dear Colleen.❤️
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Grabbing poetry Sis. The last stanza gave me goosebumps. ❤
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Thank, Sis. If I can convey emotion, I’ve done my job! ❤️
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