For dVerse, where Grace asked us to write the poetry form: Traditional Mongolian Meter. Read more HERE. I hope I got this right… the alliteration was fun to work with.
The Transformation
moon washed fog slips across the lake mellow thoughts wash against the shore memoirs scrawled outside dark shadows memories adrift, dreams no more solitude, a warm quilt of love sabbaticals of reflection sailboat songs, a return to home sage reveries—transformation cast your dreams amongst the star-shine connect with the Divine inside create magic—eclipse the world conform to what your heart desires © Colleen M. Chesebro
Such a dreamy feel to this, Colleen!
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I’ve enjoyed played with the sounds. More practice needed. LOL!
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Well, that’s what writing is–constant revising. 🤣
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Absolutely! 😀
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Love that last verse Colleen… May we create Magic that eclipse’s the world … Loved it ❤
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You’re rubbing off on me Sue. I love the messages the stars and moon send to me. 🧡
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Lol… Likewise… You are listening to your heart Colleen and the words are flowing with Divine Grace.. ❤
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Thank you, Sue. 🙏🏻 🥰
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I’d heard of Mongolian throat-singing but not Mongolian meter. I quite like the effect it’s achieved in your poem.
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The alliteration was fun to work with. You should try this one.
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Maybe after I try a pantoum!
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Makes me look forward to visiting! ❤
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Thanks, Sis. 🧡🧡🧡
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Beautiful writing Colleen! 🙂✌🏼
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Thank you, Rob. I appreciate your comment.
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Sage reveries–I like that. (K)
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Thank you. Wisdom, comes from many sources.
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It does. We just need to be open to them.
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I love the inner transformation. This is my favorite part: solitude, a warm quilt of love
and connect with the Divine inside. A powerful affirmation!
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Thank you. I love when the words seem to flow out of us.
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A beautiful poem. It does have a surreal feel to it.
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Thank you. I’m having fun with all the free verse. 🧡
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Cool! You’re most welcome
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💜 💚 💛
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A stunning transformation, Colleen, with its gentle head rhymes and imagery. The opening line not only sets the scene but also the tone for the whole poem. I love the ‘memoirs scrawled outside dark shadows’ and ‘sailboat songs, a return to home’.
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Kim, thank you so much. I enjoy learning these new forms. It really gets the creative process moving.
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Stunning piece, Colleen! The last stanza is so full of hope! Brava!✨
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Thanks so much, Franci. Lots of experimenting this week. It was fun. 💜
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You’re welcome, Colleen. 💖
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How great to have such wonderful solitutude
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Thanks, Björn. Finding this solitude is a passion.
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