his kiss upon my lips a hunger stirs my soul, heat rises, passions flare, desire so sweet... complete— until another kiss finds me and takes my breath away forever yours this kiss... © Colleen M. Chesebro
Kim is over at dVerse for Poetics: Prelude to a Kiss, asking us to write about a kiss. This is an American cinquain with a syllable count of (2-4-6-8-2) and a reverse cinquain (2-8-6-4-2) creating a double cinquain.
Sometimes, less is more…
Ahhh….
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Thanks, Ron…
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That was exactly my reaction, Ron!
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Thanks, Liz. That’s a great reaction!
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You’re welcome, Colleen. 🙂
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This makes me want to go find Vince – right now!!! 🙂 Very sweet poem. 🙂
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Awww… thanks, Marsha. Where is that man when you need him most? LOL! 😀
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Unfortunately he was off doing moving duty and putting patches in the nail holes where our pictures were hanging. He came back, though! 🙂
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WOO HOO! Are you moving pictures around? I like to that at least once a year… 😀
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Moving more than pictures! Moving us. We are moving into our rental. All our furniture is coming tomorrow. I got almost everything else out! We loved it, but it was in our big plan to consolidate after two years and we did it! Yay!
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So you’re renting? Oh my goodness. I thought you bought a home when you moved to Arizona.
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No we are moving into the rental we bought for Vince’s sister. We had to rent it for two years before we could do that. Now it will be our primary residence instead. We are going to remodel it and we hope that Cindy can find low cost housing to match her income. If not, she will live with us but it won’t be a rental any longer. It’s complicated. 🙂
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Oh, I remember you telling me this. You guys are great to help out Vince’s sister. Housing is so crazy everywhere! I’m tired of moving around. We’re here to stay now. Take care and don’t do too much! 💜
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I hear that and second your opinion! I married a realtor! We actually lived in our former house for nearly 20 years, but there was a moment when it, or the yard, was “under construction.” He brags that we stayed put for so long, but I could tell you stories that would last all night about his idea of “staying put.” He’s already got plans for this condo. The good news is that there are no grounds to remodel. 🙂 Tonight it feels delicious to have all our furniture and be warm and cozy. Have a great weekend, my friend. 🙂
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you’re cute, Marsha ❤
~David
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She is! LOL! Go Marsha!!
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🙂 And that’s why I love his kisses – he still tells me that, even when I’ve see in the mirror what he’s looking at. 🙂
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This is very sweet, Collen ❤
~David
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Thanks, David. It’s not easy writing about the prelude to these kisses…
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yeah ~ I struggled with this too ~ I’m not the sort who’s inclined to write about kissing!
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Right? But I get what Kim was going for. Actually, I liked what you did with your chōka. It was fabulous.
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I appreciated being pushed out of my comfort zone 😀
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Oh yes… it makes me do the same thing. 😀
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Brilliant, Colleen!!! Elizabeth Barrett Browning (and Lord Byron) would be very pleased with your poem, “His Kiss.”
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Thank you! That’s high praise! I found this to be a good challenge to describe his kiss. I didn’t want to say too much… if you know what I mean? LOL!
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Well done…in many ways. (K)
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Yes, sweet poem, and we’ll done!! 🥰💋
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Thank you! 💜
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So beautiful and passionate
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Ohhh, thank you. Those are the best kisses. 😀
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Indeed they are.
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The second kisses are better? Or does it matter as long as it is his.
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Lovely, Colleen. 🙂
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Thank you, Aishwarya.
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I agree, Colleen, sometimes less is more, and you’ve proved that in your double American cinquain. I love the way it begins with ‘his kiss’ and ends with ‘this kiss’, and the short phrases, no complete sentences, that emphasise the breathlessness of the moment.
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Thanks so much, Kim. I hoped the short phrases would signal the breathlessness of the moment. I’m glad you felt it too.
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Beautifully passionate!
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Thanks… it was fun to write! 😀
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Delightful to read
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I feel like I just read a beautiful love story. ❤️
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Thanks so much, E.C. That’s exactly what this represents. ❤️
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I am literally swooning right now 😍 Gorgeous poem, Colleen!
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Sanaa, thanks so much. You’ve made my day!
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You’re welcome! ❤️
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What a sweet poem, Colleen! 🙂
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
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Thanks, Yvi… 💛
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