I’ve written my first sijo… and I admit it was a bit intimidating. There is a rhythm that I’m not sure I found.
The idea is to write this sijo in three lines with a 3-4-4-4 grouping pattern in the first line; the second line echoes the 3-4-4-4 grouping with more details, and the third line is 3-5-4-4. I struggled with the line pattern, so I broke this down into syllables of 16-14-15, for around (45) 44-46 syllables.
I’ll have to work with this form some more to perfect it. Notice the punctuation and capitalization—this Korean form differs greatly from the Japanese forms.
This is for #TankaTuesday and for the Wombwell Rainbow’s form which is the sijo.

On dark moonless nights, star-shine unveils purple daytime forest shade. Shadow trees, leaf-whisper in song. In dreams, I dance alone. Deep sky reflects my soul-spirit, loneliness, my chaperone. © Colleen M. Chesebro

Halloween is almost here!
how can this possibly be your first sijo? that’s hard to believe, given how beautifully crafted it is!
❤
David
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OMG!!! Thank you. I’ve not written this form before and actually watched a video on how to write it on the Wombrel Rainbow site. I know the cadence is off. I’m close… LOL. You made my day. Thank you. 🙏🏻 🥰
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Draws you in and opens the imagination! ❤
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So I figured the wife haunted the mansion… she’s stuck and can’t move on. 🤷🏼♀️
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This one is shivery…well done! (K)
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Thanks, Kerfe. The syllable count is something I would need to work with. I guess you actually split the lines, but I’d have to play with that some more.
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Lovely rhyme
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Thanks, Sadje. It was a little different with the specific syllable count. 🥰
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You’re welcome. I’m more impressed when people can write different forms of poetry.
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LOL! I try… I think it’s fun learning the different forms. 🌹
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Yes, I do that once a month with Rebecca’s monthly poetry challenges.
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That’s wonderful! 😍❤️
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Thanks.
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Beautiful, Colleen. The loneliness comes through.
I need to look at this form. I saw Paul’s post, but I didn’t have time to pursue it.
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Oh, my! You did a wonderful job with this form, Colleen! 💖
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Thanks, Franci. Well, I wasn’t too sure about the syllable count adding up to the way we should write the form. I like how it turned out.
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My pleasure, Collen! 💞
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Thanks, Merril. It’s an interesting form. I like the way this turned out, but I think I’m off on the syllable count. Paul shares a video I found most helpful.
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You’re welcome, Colleen.
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I use the theme Shoreditch, too, and find it works well for my blog. I added the Dynamic HR (spacer) between my sidebar widgets to add more pizazz.
I also like that it has 2 footers and one can be a different color.
Your blog looks very nice, Colleen. 💖
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That does seem like a tricky form, Colleen. But wow, did you ever pull it off beautifully. Dreamy, haunting, and emotional.
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Thanks, Diana. Those shadows are so expressive. I’m not totally correct on the syllable count per line, but it’s close. LOL! More practice. 😀
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It was lovely. I’m so glad you shared it.
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I have a lot to learn!!!!! Do you have the link to Wombrel Rainbow site. I can’t seem to find it.
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Here is the link to his blog: https://thewombwellrainbow.com. I subscribed to him so that I could get his posts in with the comments. 🧡
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Many thanks!!! Looking forward to exploring.
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He has a lot of good stuff on his blog. 💜
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That nightly star-shine while you whirl under it in loneliness creates a beautiful, haunting image, Colleen.
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Thanks, Lisa. I loved the shadows in your photo. 😍
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You are very welcome. I’m glad the shadows spoke to you ❤
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Such an intriguing form, the Sijo. That last line wrapped evrything up so beautifully. Like your undead avatar.
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Yes! The souls of the dead hover near as the veil thins. 🎃🎃🎃
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Anything with a cadence – like sonnets, limerick… I’m deaf.
I enjoyed the mystery of you piece which fits the photo. Though being alone can be a blessing. Maybe not in a spooky place though 😉
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Thanks Jules, those Iambic pentameters… and all of those type devices are difficult for me too. I don’t have the ear for them.
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I stick with what keeps me happy. I’ll try new things occasionally. 🙂
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