
This week’s Carrot Ranch November 7, 2022, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that includes something squeaky. What is squeaky and why? How does it move the story or disrupt a character? Listen, write, and go where the prompt leads! Submit by November 12, 2022.

as autumn flows into winter, the squeak of the old metal windmill vibrates in the wind—
The fierce winds howl across the Montana prairie. The brown grasses undulate like waves on a tumultuous sea. There’s a bite in the air. I shiver.
Today, I’m captivated by the wide expanse of winter-blue sky. Clouds hem the gathering storm to the north, a sure sign of the snow to come.
The wailing squeak of the old metal windmill reminds me of the wailing of the banshee back home in Ireland. I swallow my homesickness and make my way to the mines.
© Colleen M. Chesebro

Read more about Drumlummon Mine at Marysville, Montana HERE.
Ooh, so vivid. I was that person making my way to the mines!
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This one ended in a different direction than the one I was expecting. Well done!
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Thanks, Liz. I like these surprise endings.
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You’re welcome, Colleen.
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Such a beautifully written piece
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Thanks so much, Sadje. 💜
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You’re most welcome
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Brilliant piece Coleen..❤️🌹
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Thanks so much. 🙏🏻
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Those western skies are endless, huge. You capture how small we are in those landscapes. (K)
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Can you imagine what it must have been like in the 1800s?
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When I think of what it must have looked like to the first explorers…another planet, practically.
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Lewis and Clark chronicled much of their early travels. After living in Montana for 17 years, all I can is what hearty folk, they were. Brrr. Those were some of the most brutal winters I’ve ever known.
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That would definitely not be for me!
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Beautifully written with stunning imagery, Colleen. 💖
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Thanks Franci. Montana is wide open spaces. I can’t imagine what it was like in the 1800s!
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Most welcome, Colleen!
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This is very descriptive, Colleen. Beautiful.
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Thank you, Robbie. It’s exactly how Montana is. It’s a beautiful wide open, wild place.
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I so enjoyed this, Colleen!
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David
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Thanks so much, David. 💜
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Lovely short story Colleen…. And loved the photos shares … Very nostalgic..
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Thanks, Sue. We lived in Montana for many years. The cold weather finally was too much to take. 💜
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Not surprising Colleen. But looks beautiful country.
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It’s wide open and seems to go on forever… that’s Montana.
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I love how this haibun evolves, Colleen, from an observation of the changing season to something much more personal. A beautiful poem, my friend, and poignant take on the prompt.
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Thanks you, Diana. These flash fiction pieces need an ending that is unexpected. I think haibun are the same way. It gives us a deeper meaning.
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Good one, and love the picture. I just watched an episode of the Mountain Man series where they built a windmill for their rustic house. Pretty interesting.
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Windmills are so useful. I can’t even imagine how people survived in those temperatures without the comforts we had today. Lewis and Clark almost perished, except for the help from the Native Americans. We left Montana when we couldn’t deal with -40 degrees F. in the winter. Michigan is much milder.
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Michigan used to be in my sales territory (when I set up corporate daycare centers). I avoided Michigan during Winter! Glad you think it’s ‘mild’.
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Ha, ha… Jacqui, it’s mild compared to Montana. I think I’m a winter person. I definitely like it cooler.
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[…] The Windmill (haibun) by Colleen M. Chesebro […]
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Cool. You had me with the haibun, then that last paragraph put it in a whole new place.
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Thanks, D. I have those Montana flashbacks. I never know where they’ll take me.
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Excellent haibun, and very evocative too.
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Thanks, Jude. We lived in Montana for about 17 years. It’s so cold there. Brrrr….
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